Monday, March 10, 2014

HYPE rewriting ( mamun)

     These days, advertisements are everywhere. Besides this, these all ads (advertisement) represents some kind of product or service informations and they pursue us to buy those products and services. Even though, advertisement are helpful to get information about products and services; undoubtedly,i believe that it makes mental pollutants,distract our brain and has many negative effects in our lives,society and the country.
     
       First, advertisements pollutants our mind and distract our thoughts everyday. everyday moment of sun rising, Newspaper, TV, radio, phone, store, shopping mall, gas station, and transportation systems commercial ads for services or products pollution floods, pollute and distract our brains till the moment we fall asleep. Because of these kind of pollution we are being scatterbrained. For example, we inspire by watching those commercial ads and we just buy their product without thinking or verifying it, Moreover, sometime these ads make us confused by pollution, then we could not make the correct decision and would not able to buy the right product or service. Most of the time advertisement distract and pollute children; moreover, by watching ads children learn some stuff dangerous ( the ad contain dangerous stunts) and fall in many bad situation when they try that at home. For examples i saw some kind of candy,cookies and toys ads on tv, on that tv ad i saw by eating or having that candy or toy they can get power like superman or hulk. Therefore, they can fly, jump and can do many impossible stuff. children try those things at home; surely, the get in accident. On top of that, advertisement make us made when they thrown in between interesting tv show or important news.
     
          Next, advertisements has many negative effect in our lives, such as its misrepresents, unrealistic expedition, false image, not providing the same product as advertise, waste of money and time; moreover, it change and block natural views. For examples if you look out at the window in Manhattan; obviously, you will see hundreds of sign boards or billboards or giant size of tv where are some king of advertisement instead of watching trees flowers. City puts many tv in the city instead of planting tree or flower.
 Advertisement wast lot of money, companies are spend a lot of money for making advertises, which represents their product or service to us. Author Kally Lans states that ,"everyday an estimated 12 billion display ads, 3 million radio commercial, and more than 200000 TV commercial are dumped in to North America's  collective unconscious,"  so just imagine how much money they spend? To tell the truth, have we ever think that who paying those money? Consumers pay all the money because they add all the ads expenses to the products. Hopefully if they wouldn't spend much on ads, we would get the same product in more cheaper price. Finally, i just want to explain one more bad effect of advertisement. Some time we dont get the same quality of product as they advertise and by doing this they cheating the people and deceive the society. For example, beauty and health product, nutrition may not live up their promise, resulting in waste consumer money. Disclaimer are often hidden in very small print on the product.
     
        In conclusion, i just want to say that, the way advertisement help us at the same way they causing many problems, negative effects and polluting our mind, society; besides this, it waste time, paper, money and polluting our mother earth. companies in the world should be honest about their product or service advertisement; on top of that, should cut some expenses on it. The way we can be happy and have a nice society and world.

1 comment:

Doctor X said...

You prove here that you understand the essay structure and the "sandwich" paragraph--good job.

What we need to work on:

1. Including a *clear* summary of the article. For this, you need to work on the following signal/introductory phrase when you summarize the reading:

In his article X, the author (or name the author) reports/ explains/ argues/ points out...

2. In addition, please use the following signal phrase when you refer back to the reading:

As the author (or name the author) reports/ explains/ argues/ points out...